Essay writing tips

•All three subjects that are mentioned in the thesis statement are covered (in the order given).

•Written in first person.

•No contractions

•Includes a linking  sentence at the end of the introduction (in the form of a question) to connect it to the rest of the essay. The rest of the essay is a response to this question.

•Includes a TOPIC SENTENCE at the beginning of each paragraph.

•Uses a range of formal connectives (to connect paragraphs AND ideas within paragraphs).

•The conclusion is the answer to the question asked in the last line of the introduction (with the detail of the answer given throughout the essay).

The introduction needs to include the following three components:

1.General statement

2.Thesis statement

3.Linking question

Sample essay

Obesity is a serious global problem in today's society, especially among young people. I think high rates of alcohol consumption, addiction to fast food and a lack of adequate teaching in schools is to blame for this situation. So what can be done about it?

Alcohol consumption in the West has been increasing alarmingly. This is an important reason why people have been getting fatter, and a simple solution for this problem is to cut down on the amount of alcohol consumed.

However, addiction to fast food is also a serious problem. It is so popular that it has become an addiction, and is a major cause of young people getting fatter. This kind of food is very fattening and parents need to limit how much fast food their chiildren eat.

Furthermore, the schools have not done their job well. Kids don't understand the connection between excessiveb drinking, fast food and being obese. Schools need to introduce special lessons on good diet and healthy living.

In conclusion, I think parents and schools need to do a better job of explaining the relationship between drinking alcohol, eating too much fast food and becoming obese. If adequate education is made available, this problem can be solved in the future.

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